Friday Fictioneers: Maggie Climbs Trees

Hello, fellow Fictioneers and random bystanders alike! And Happy New Year. I thought this as good a time as any to get my blog going again, as well as get back into the swing of doing Friday Fictioneers! I must apologize that my story isn’t very happy, as is my style. It’s not exactly sad, either. It’s more just life. It has a slight language warning, but I don’t think it’s too bad. Just one word that I’m sure most of us hear once, maybe twice a day, at least. And, as always, it’s 100 words on the dot. I hope you enjoy it!

FF 11

Maggie Climbs Trees

I grew up watching Maggie climb trees.

I grew up listening to Dad yell at Maggie for climbing trees. He said it was unnatural for a dog.

I grew up listening to Dad yell at Mom for a lot of things. For everything. For nothing.

I grew up watching Mom yell back at Dad. For scaring us. For being an asshole. For always talking without listening.

I grew up watching Maggie cower under the couch as Mom and Dad yelled.

I grew up watching Maggie climb trees, wondering why she bothered coming down. I wished I could climb trees, too.

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12 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers: Maggie Climbs Trees

  1. Dear Moonbeams,

    Language? What language? I enjoyed the rhythm and structure of this piece. I know how your narrator feels. I grew up feeling the same way.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    • Thanks! I’m glad you like it.

      I didn’t actually think anyone would worry about that one word, but I figured better safe than sorry. I guess it comes from being raised in a house where any slip of the tongue or whispered curse was met with trouble. 🙂

  2. This is so real… I think it’s very sad.. Poor child.. poor dog. Does not sound like a home for a kid or a dog… and I’m fine with the language.

  3. Jan Brown says:

    I like the rhythm of the piece very much, the repetitive phrases that drive home the reality of this family’s life, and the concept of climbing the tree as a form of escape. A very effective “slice of life” story. Well done.

  4. You expressed the voice and pain living in a violent household. Good writing.

  5. Sandra says:

    Excellent; the rhythm, the repetition and the childlike narrator. Well done! I could so identify with this…

  6. mike olley says:

    Well written. The language didn’t bother me, it was within context and needed to make the piece work as effectively as it does.

  7. draliman says:

    This was so very well told and I loved the style you used. You described the way the child felt, living in a house always filled with arguing, beautifully.

    I had to read it three times before I realised which word it was you warned us about 🙂

  8. This is a lovely story, filled with sadness. Wonderful! (And I had to re-read to find the word, too. I was braced for much worse. Thanks for not going there.) 🙂

    janet

  9. rgayer55 says:

    Believe me, I’ve been called a lot worse than that word. 🙂
    I feel for the kid and the dog, but unfortunately this is reality for many children and pets.

  10. They didn’t make trees high enough in my neighborhood to escape the sound.
    Good use of the prompt.

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