Burning (Friday Fictioneers +an announcement)

My second Friday Fictioneers story! I must say, I really like the way this one turned out. I got in everything I wanted, and I got exactly 100 without even editing! Please tell me what you think about it. I really enjoyed the feedback I got last week, and look forward to reading more comments, as well as seeing what others came up with for this photo prompt!

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Burning

I sat in the kitchen, staring at Mama’s oil lamps.

You’re such a weirdo!

It was another hard day at school.

Don’t you own any normal clothes?

But I know how to deal with it.

Freak!

I can deal with her.

Witch!

The candles before me flicker faster.

What are you doing?

I’ll never have to deal with her again.

Sara? I was only kidding!

She’ll learn her lesson.

W-what’s wrong with my chest

She’ll never make fun of me again.

Stop! It hurts!

“Sara? Is there something wrong with the candles?”

“No, Mama.”

I quickly turn out the lamps.

 

Quick announcement: Just so that my subscribers know, I am participating in Blogging from A to Z next month, but I still intend to do Friday Fictioneers as well. So, don’t freak out if there are two posts from me in your feed on Wednesday instead of one. Depending on how well I can keep up with my posts and such, I may move my Friday Fictioneer story to Sundays, since they’re the only day I won’t be posting a full-length story. Wish me luck, and I wish the same to anyone else who my already have decided to participate, or who might decide to participate, too! 😀 Also, if for whatever reason, you are subscribed to me and absolutely do not want to get two posts from me every Wednesday, just say something to me in the comments, and I’ll make sure I move my FF posts to Sundays. If it’s all the same to everyone else, though, I’ll probably just stick to the 2-posts thing, since it’d be easier to remember.

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16 thoughts on “Burning (Friday Fictioneers +an announcement)

  1. Very well done. I like the contrast of the present and the memory.

  2. Oh this was sinister and nice… Love it.

  3. May not be the recommended way to take care of bullying, but it obviously works. Does Sara live near Buffy? 🙂

    janet

  4. Very sinister! I loved the interweaving.

  5. One writes sinisterly, one poignant, one humorous, one sci-fi, it amazes me what all of us see with these prompts. Totally had an image of darling Sara smirking as she turned out the lamps. Well done.

  6. Sandra says:

    That was a really good way of telling the story. An excellent idea and quit unnerving. Well done!

  7. Glad you joined us at Friday Fictioneers.
    There are so many questions you leave for the reader to figure out (which is a great style)
    will see you over at A to Z should be a great time and challenge

  8. jwdwrites says:

    They don’t say ‘don’t play with fire’ for nothing. 🙂

  9. kz says:

    ha! a kick-ass tale. would love to have her powers ^^ lol great story and i really love how you presented it

  10. Welcome back! Didn’t I warn you? Addictive!
    Your story is every bullied child’s dream. Good one.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

  11. Parul says:

    This could turn into a full blown teen drama with some black magic thrown in!
    Good job!

  12. Joe Owens says:

    Bullying is such a common occurrence that we are sometimes blind to it. It is a shame the character in your story had to resort to such a final step to end her torment.

    I plan to join you in the A to Z challenge. I followed your blog so i can be sure to read your post each day. I hope you can find time to look at mine as well.

  13. 40again says:

    Really different way of telling your story, well done.
    Dee

  14. That was really well done. I like the cold, calculation on one side, contrasted with the emotions of derision and fear on the other.

  15. petrujviljoen says:

    Liked this format a lot.

  16. Very well conceived and executed.
    Loved it.

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